I am not virgin when she said
He became silent as he got mad
It was a dream that turn out to be bad
It was a blunder or her mistake
I thought it was love at first
Later I realized it was lust
He used me and throw me back
My life begin to shake
Then you touched my heart & soul
Without any fear, my past I told
Its up to you to accept me or not
But I know you love me a lot
Only one thing I can say
Don’t leave me please stay
He was my past my mistake
But you are my future my fate
I love you from whole of my heart
Please love me back don’t go apart
~Virus_miki
Does past speaks your present ?
Does virginity matters more than personality??
Well ! for me the story was innocent love confessing her innocent lust.
What more should I say…I think she was correct…Atleast she was not acting clever…May be this shows her love and innocence enough.
Keep scribbling miki
Keep raising your voice
Yours loving warrior
Naina
So nice of you… We need more people like you in this society…!!!
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Very nicely explained warrior! One thing more I felt in the poem, that the girl is pleading with her guy to accept her love. This tells the attitude of the society how much they fill the girls with guilt.
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This is what I wanted to say…. Why to question on girl… Being honest she explained her bad experience…. Which was correct for her at that particular moment when she was with her ex… She loved him and she trusted him so she was comfortable with him…
Later on the boy left her…
After years she found someone else and she thought of being true to him.. so she confessed… And she also beg not to leave ….
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Yes I understood that. It takes a lot of effort and risk to speak up about our past to our present. There is always a fear of him/ her leaving you for a reason like this and it is a great test for the future one too whether they truly love you or not as past never matters to a true love when they have their heart desire with them in present
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So true… !! I think will complete this post…. Or why don’t you complete in your views….???
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I’d Love too les see if i can do justice to it
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Not a Virgin!!, I repeated
Aghast, in my mind
Though outwards difficult
For me was an expression to find
Innocent and cute she was
To me when she first met
Oh God! love was in my fate
From a girl so unchaste
All the moments with her
Happily I had spent
And a simple truth about her
All castles turned to sand
Mr Hyde in me was having
A boisterous hysterical laugh
And was dominating brusquely
The mellow other half
He kept shouting and screaming
Adding insults to her
Calling her names so livid
Which I found impossible to utter
And at moment such as this
Dr jekyll found his voice
And his clever and witty rebuttals
Took Hyde for a surprise
I still remember the day
When together we sat
And for surreal hours
We had those lovely chats
You felt an instant care
In her tender voice
And to her chatter
Could feel positive vibes
The time together you spent
Were best time you ever had
And days without her
Were always sad
It was not only that
With you she was for fun
But even when you were down
She helped you often
Now to you, a question
I’m forced to ask
And this will do nothing
But have you unmasked
Were it the luscious lips
Or her genial smile
Which had captivated
You all this while
Was it her soul
Which you sincerely loved
Or for her body
Was this basal lust
Did to your soul
She make a connect
Or you like a useless git
Were busy looking her vital stats
She told you all about
Her lost virginity
Just because she had
Trust in your emphatic ability
Was she an infidel
Wouldn’t she had it hidden
Rather than telling you
Which might cost this relation
And let me tell you
One thing for sure
She was not wrong then ( while she slept with him)
Nor now is she impure
It is her body and
her bloody decision
And with him not you
she was in relation
And it might be a mistake
On her judgement part
Still she told you all
About the dismal past
Don’t pity on her
For her pleading face
Or accept her just because
Her tears you can’t face
Her love is valuable
And surely a heavenly gift
And you should choose it only
When for it you consider yourself fit
When you truly love her
And her past doesn’t matter
And you two strive hard
To make life mutually better
With these words jekyll
Gave rest to his voice
And Hyde was getting small
Looking like a novice
With a smile I opened
My arms for a hug
Her tears drenched the shoulders
Mine( tears) ruined her make-up
Gazing in her eyes
Holding up her chin
I love you i said
Much more than ever been
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Amazed…..!!!
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I didn’t find àny other word… After reading this….!! Truly awesome….!!!! Best reply I can ever get…!!!
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Don’t pity on her… Followed by other two stanza àre certainly the heart….!!
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“Ruined her makeup ” this whole para add a nice humor to it…..!!!
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And the character sketch of Mr.Hyde and Dr.Jekyll gives an astonishing flow to poem….!!!
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Thanks A lot miki! DrJekyll and Mr Hyde are characters from RL Stevenson’s novel which I happened to read while I was young. My poem is just a response to your brilliantlly composed poem, without which I could not have come up with this. I hope I did justice to your poem. Regarding the heart of poem, yes those three stanzas are the point where I felt the poem has achieved its zenith and touched the very point I want to speak and thank you for make up remark , you cleverly understood the humour, for a love story should always end with smile .
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I know about the novel and character names… Though i haven’t read….!!! Actually its also à play…. I exactly didn’t remember the name… Or the name was this only….!!!
And yes… I can never find a better reply… I was trying to write… But this character sketch just boost the level of your writing….!! I could not think in this way…. That’s way i was struck…..!!!!
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It was the strange case of Dr Jekyll and Mr Hyde
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Play in the sense series… I don’t know much about it….!!!!
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ok
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I would like to know your other four lines… If you are comfortable with that….!!
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How absurd it felt always
To Love someone for her face
Or for the-oomph she had
Sweltre figure never made me mad( in love)
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This one is also good…!!!👍👍👏👏👏
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Then today while writing I understood that I have to write as a guy not as myself
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Haha….!!
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But still you added yourself…. As i know many people who just don’t accept the girl because of her terrible experience in past… !!!
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It’s very difficult to leave oneself out of one’s own poem. And I had once a heated debate with my friends on the same topic and my reply then too was the same
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So.,.. Had you awaken your Friend….???
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Well since it was very rare of me to partake in issues like this, they rejected my views saying that you are impractical
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Excepted
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And few of lines got lost as I made them while driving and forgot when I sat to write.
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No issues….!!! The outcome is complete in itself….!!
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Btw… Got to know about your awesome talent…. Thinking while driving….!!!
I must say drive carefully…!!!
Because a writer has his own world in imagination….!!! Where thir is not a single scope of anyone else except he and his imagination…!
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I have this problem of getting absorbed in any topic, that’s why I have stopped writing 😂
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This is problem….?? Or a very nice nature ….. !!!👌👌👌.
You think in all the directions… Go through all pros and cons….
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Excess of anything is bad 😅
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May be for you….!! But for we its good…!!!
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😂
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And to tell you the truth I started writng the reply the day i read your poem, but couldnt write more than four lines and those four lines didnt even made to the finals. It was only after today’s discussion I thought of finaly writing it and gave it the shape of contrasting ideology. But as far as If it was me, my immediate response would be that I don’t care about the past
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So nice..
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😀😀👍👍
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As i said it earlier also… More people like you are need of society….!!!
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There are many we just need to awaken them
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You can say….! But my answer will be.. May be….
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Maybe the people I interacted were different
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Hm…👍
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Post this also….!! Let the world know…!!
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This is not an independent poem per se. It only follows yours. Thanks to you and Naina to keep the poet in me alive in this hectic world
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So what … I think you should do… Rest is upto you
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I think we both should give credits to naina….!!!
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Yeah you are right. Though I have got a writer’s block and unless I get myself emotionally active I can’t write a poem and I chose to remain in this realm. Till last year I wrote every now and then but being having a hectic schedule it is very difficult to write while working. But interacting with a younger generation and reading their thoughts take the stress out of my mind. The youthful thoughts you people have keeps the youth in me awake wanting to change the society and the system.
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So stay tuned with us…..😀😀
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Sure 😂
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Hey author….!!
First of all a huge nd great salute to u for such a nice thought as u raised a Vry difficult topic.
The people hesitate to talk on this even in Today’s advanced nd so called modern world..
I know it was nt an easy task for u also, bt the way u did is amazing , mind-blowing…..
Now everybody can understand this, nd the girl will get proper respect nd the rights….
Keep scribbling,,, keep raising the rare nd the difficult topics with ur extraordinary thought.. . .
God Bless…………… !!!
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Hope for best… !! It may help…
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Hey author….!!
First of all a huge nd great salute to u for such a nice thought as u raised a Vry difficult topic.
The people hesitate to talk on this even in Today’s advanced nd so called modern world..
I know it was nt an easy task for u also, bt the way u did is amazing , mind-blowing…..
Now everybody can understand this, nd the girl will get proper respect nd the rights….
Keep scribbling,,, keep raising the rare nd the difficult topics with ur extraordinary thought.. . .
God Bless…………… !!!
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Thank you for your this many
commendations and citations….!!!
I think these are the topics to be raised in society
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Thanks for appraisal….!!!
You always keep me encouraged by doing this….!! ☺😊😊
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You selection of topics really delights me. These are the topics which exhibit the realities of the world and also the challenges ahead us. Keep it up dear. It is my honour that my words encourage you.
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😀😀😊😊😃
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Looking forward to your new poems and discussions
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You say … What new should I choose….???
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Choose any controversy
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Ohk… Let me think
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A very difficult and arduous topic you chose to write about which is a less talked about subject bringing out various taboos in the society. First of let me give you accolades for marvelous rhyming scheme and flow of the poem.
Coming to the topic, the boy, if he truly loves her, shouldn’t be mad at her. He may be shocked to hear the revelation and this might make him dumbstruck for a moment, still the love is about soul not body.
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